Legend of Maldana (NOT WoW, this is my own fantasy univurse)

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I'll be having a read tonight!

Appart from some Major grammar errors, this was AMAZING! I would buy this, I really would.

Now, the only thing I have to say that's constructive, is this:

It needed more "Explanation" in some parts, like in Chapter 1 where the elves were meeting up, it said "...around the Big table" instead of maybe using "Around the large, wooden table"

Still, a majorly interesting read and I hope I get some more of this from you

(I was actually expecting Henry to rape that kid in his barracks o.O)

For once I hear some criticism, hehe.

Thank you alot and I'm glad you like it.

This is not an excuse, but I would be surprised if the first 1-2 chapters wouldn't be as good. Fun detail is, I wrote those two about three years ago, while 3-4 were written last year.

I will keep the detail part in mind and I really do need to check my grammar.

(Actualy when I wrote the first chapter, it was partly RPed with the former owner of the character Salid. I think I would have written it this year, that event in the barracks might had been darker; probebly not rape but more violent.)